tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8479567298871662473.post6224209084527122568..comments2011-10-22T12:48:59.682-04:00Comments on Tryl's Meanderings: Fiction Fridays: The Dark StrangerTryllyamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04238564791600676346noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8479567298871662473.post-92062841498966175872009-08-18T02:50:45.518-04:002009-08-18T02:50:45.518-04:00Chris, I love your suggestions. If the word count ...Chris, I love your suggestions. If the word count ever gets expanded past where it is now, some of that will have to be included. It'll make the store so much the richer.<br /><br />As for not being a writer, well, I've been reading your blog for awhile now. Besides, I was so far away from even considering that I'd one day call myself a writer when I did these bits and pieces. There's got to be plenty of room for improvement!<br /><br />Thanks for the comment!Tryllyamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04238564791600676346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8479567298871662473.post-63500713616621175852009-08-15T18:02:09.643-04:002009-08-15T18:02:09.643-04:00M: enjoyed reading this! (Been a long time since I...M: enjoyed reading this! (Been a long time since I've read your work.)<br /><br />As before, your writing is very evocative of tone, mood, setting: I can almost see it. But I wonder, is what I'm imagining what you are intending? I think my mind is connecting the dots that you have laid down, and you could probably provide a little more specific texture/detail (what clothes are they wearing, more senses: mist in the air, smell of the street, any colors in the landscape, size of buildings) However, having said that, the action moves fast and flows easily, so I hope my suggestion doesn't mess it up by slowing it down!<br /><br />(I'm not a writer, hope this is useful!)<br /><br />CChrishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13633134551913592699noreply@blogger.com